A person worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old fashioned values such as honour, kindness, and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that values

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as honor

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bestow honor or rewards upon

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indness have become unimportant and the only important thing is the amount of

money

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a person has. I strongly disagree with

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statement and I will explain the reasons below. There is no doubt that respect towards richer people has increased in the

last

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few decades, so, the more income you have, the more respected you will be.

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this

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does not mean that a rich person is more valued.

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, someone who has a lot of

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and does not share his wealth is going to be seen as a selfish person. People neither like nor respect them.

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, rich people who serve the society through their charitable acts receive a lot of adulation and admiration. Take,

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, the case of Bill Gates. He is one of the most respected persons in the whole world

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world, but

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not because he is the richest man. Rather

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him so respectable is his philanthropic work. There are

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lots of celebrities like actors and sports persons who work for charitable institutions. They use their fame and influence to gather support for the causes they believe in. They

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attract a lot of respect.

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, in Spain, my country, there is an actor couple who quit their profession to volunteer for a charity helping poor children. These actors are well recognized because of their kind acts and not because of their

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. In conclusion, I firmly believe that

money

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will certainly increase a person’s social standing;

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, old values

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as kindness and generosity are still very much cherished and in order to win the true love and admiration of their fellow citizens rich people have to show kindness and generosity.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

294 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

social status
material possessions
old-fashioned values
honour
kindness
trust
empathy
media influence
self-worth
metrics of success
financial achievements
community contributions
superficial connections
emotional bonds
life satisfaction
stress and anxiety
policy changes
community programs
restoring balance
personal character

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A person worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old fashioned values such as honour, kindness, and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

‎ Some young people leave the countryside to live in cities or towns, leaving only ‎older people in the countryside. What are the problems of this issue? What can ‎be done to solve this problem?‎

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

Many people argue that free public transportation should be available in most major cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this idea?

Some people believe that governments should spend money on the arts. Others assert that this money should be used to improve public services and infrastructure.