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Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However,other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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 the advent of the internet,
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 education has become very popular and many universities now offer different courses through it.
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,
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 there are many advantages of learning at one's own place, there are some disadvantages for learners as well. I think the pros outweigh the cons and in
this
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 essay, I will discuss
about
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it in
details
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detail
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.
Distance
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 education has made
life
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the life
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 of
students
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 comfortable and they can easily sit in their own comfort zone and study
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 convenience. Those who are working full time can reap dividends from it,
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, homemakers, single mothers, and
also
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, those who cannot afford the expense of living in cities and
study
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.
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, those who are busy during
daytime
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, when most of the colleges function, can easily spare time during the evening and night to learn.
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 even through a computer at home can help them to achieve their dreams.
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, there are others who think
distant
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 learning is not appropriate for some
students
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. It is quite true to some extent,
a
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that a
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student who needs practical training cannot get benefits from these types of learning.
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, medical
students
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 need intensive training to achieve skills to practice, they can only learn theories if they are good at group studies, lectures, practical knowledge and demonstrations.
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, I think these types of education can be beneficial even for medical
students
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while
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 studying in a regular college and want to learn more about their
course
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courses
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 from a prestigious university, which offers
distance
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 classes.
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, even though there are some drawbacks,
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when compared to the benefits, learning from a
distance
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 is a boon to many individuals who are willing
of acquiring
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to acquire
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 qualifications in their free time and
unable
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are unable
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 to attend a university.

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task response
Ensure that your introduction and conclusion clearly present your stance on the issue. Develop and present your ideas in a logical and coherent manner to improve task response and coherence and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
You need to improve the organization of your essay to enhance coherence and cohesion. Ensure that your ideas are presented in a clear, logical, and well-structured manner, with a clear introduction and conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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