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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

#people #choices
It is considered that, in
this
 day and age, as people, we have too many options available for everything. I agree with
this
 statement because currently due to more options quality of our lives are improving to a great extent. My explanation is argued in pursing paragraphs. To initiate, among all choices,
food
 is one, which is one top. Recently, we have various options of
food
 according to age and varieties of cuisines are
also
 increasing. To elaborate, in the past, there was a lack of difference between
food
 according to a particular age. But, today we have separate stores for baby's
food
 and elder's
food
 with more varieties. In terms of education realm, as compared to the past more and more education courses are available as per our interest of subjects. In the past era courses were not available
of
Suggestion
on
 every
filed
catch or pick up (balls) in baseball or cricket
field
, but recently people can make their career in any field.
Moreover
, regarding to sources of leisure activities is
also
 rising with the long passage of days. To illustrate, in today's technological world, we have the internet, several play stations to play, theatres
,
Accept space
,
 television and laptops. These all appliances, upgrading our entertainment.
Nevertheless
, extra choices are not accessible to every person. Many underdeveloped countries are lacking of basic necessities like
food
, financial resources and health.
In addition
 to
this
, some courses are applicable only in the developed countries. To infer, it is undeniable fact that, in the present, many people live their lives as per their comfort and convenience and it is only because of more that enough options.
However
, the government should provide few rudimentary choices to the underdeveloped nations.
This
, in turn, they can improve their lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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