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In rich countries, any additional wealth won’t make people happier. Do you agree or disagree?

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Second
 source of
income
 is always considered important, because the circumstances may change abruptly. It does not depend on the person financial conditions if he or she is financially strong or not, they are always advised to have an alternative source of earnings. I completely disagree with the statement that additional wealth will not make people happier in advanced countries. Many people in developed countries rely on salary
income
 which comes after certain deductions. They spend their lives on
such
 incomes,
however
, if they are either ill or unable to work,
then
 they are not a position to spend their lives happily.
However
, if additional investments are made from savings,
then
 they have no tension for their families and themselves. That’s why people are always encouraged to leave a certain portion of the earnings, for investments to create an additional source of
income
.
For instance
, many people in rich countries have either made investments in capital markets or in small businesses to keep themselves ready for unexpected circumstances.
However
, certain people believe that
this
 is not always true as the expenses are very high that do not leave any amount for creating any additional
income
. They spend most of the
income
 on unnecessary things which unable to them to save. That’s why it is always suggested to not save after spending, always
first
 save and
then
 spend. But
this
 is all about management, like there are certain people exist in
this
 world who have a very low
income
, but they have managed their expenses in
such
 a way which left the a moderate amount of money for saving to keep them happy in adverse situations. In conclusion, though some people say that additional
income
 do not make people happy,
however
, it’s all about the a person’s financial situation if he or she manages his finances in
such
 a way which left him or her with a significant amount for investment,
this
 would certainly keep him or her happy.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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