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Earlier technological developments brought more benefits and changed the lives of ordinary people more than recent technological developments. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Undoubtedly, we are living in a technological era, where technology has spread its legs in every nook and corners. Though, there are some individuals who hold the arguments that earlier technological developments are far better and advantageous to the society as compared to the recent ones. I firmly disagree with the statement.
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 with, latest developments have benefited and altered our lives in multifarious ways that we can enjoy almost all comforts and conveniences that
life
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 can ever offer before.
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, today we can take breakfast in London, lunch in Dubai, diner at India, owing to the fastest means of transportations.
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, the internet has revolutionised communication that today we are able to send and receive e-mails at the click of the mouse. It would be worthwhile to cite an example regarding internet usage that we chat and do video conferences with our kith and kin from any part of the globe. These are a few examples about how dramatically recent developments have benefited and modified our
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, in the field of medicine, we have gadgets to diagnose cancer and many chronic diseases at
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, if we look at the means we
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 to drive to work, the electrical appliances we
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 at home, the devices we
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 in our offices, the facilities and equipments that we
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 in factories, we can say with certainty that recent technological advancements have transformed our lives beyond imagination. Admittedly, earlier technological advancements did change our lives from the time when they were achieved, especially after the industrial revolution.
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, it is self-evident as to what benefited and altered the people's
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 more, telegraph or smartphone, phonograph or MP4? To conclude, it is true to say that the past advancements did change the human being's
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 at some extent with time, but it is irrefutable to say that latest developments has less benefited or modified the ordinary people's
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