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Education abroad is the key factor for becoming successful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#education #factor
Nowadays studying abroad has been
an
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a
 crucial part of students' education. Some claim that being abroad or the aim of studying is an essential factor that allow people to gain an accomplishment. Even though
meeting
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the meeting
 is a fact that, in my opinion, is
such
 a type of negative aspect of education abroad, I mainly agree with the statement that clarifies
brieflt
for a short time
briefly
 the pros of being abroad.
Firstly
, I will explain the arguments mentioned as negative. Going abroad for the
first
 time may lead people to a culture shock which means to be extremely excited about a
strange
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stranger
 or an unfamiliar situation.
This
 factor, in turn, requires some time to get used to.
Therefore
, being abroad can be hard for
someoens
a human being
someone
eho
the person or persons that; the one that
who
 have a strong link with their family members of friends. BBC,
for instance
, reported the news about the student crying regularly because of
feeling
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feelings
the feeling
a feeling
 of loneliness and as you may notice, he was abroad and far from his native land. On the other land,
albeiht
(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
about
albeit
 some negative factors mentioned above, studying abroad creates plenty of opportunities. It gives a chance to grow as a person to the students. Being far from the familiar situation and pushing themselves into difficulties will lead them to specialize
on
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in
 their studies and to manage
themselves
Accept comma addition
themselves, although
although
 it may seem some kind of suffering at
first
 sight.
Additionally
, it can give students social prestige among their friends and, in turn, makes easier to find one of the relevant job opportunities. In conclusion, it is a fact that there are difficulties and negative sides of studying abroad.
However
, because its benefits
overweighs
in other respects or ways
otherwise
overweight
 its drawbacks, those negative aspects should be easily negligible.
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