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Some people prefer to live in house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment

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Modernization has been a catalyst in the change of living lifestyle.
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 has created a divide in people's opinion about living in a house or an apartment. With the help of studies and examples I will delineate how living in an apartment is more helpful than its counterpart.
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 with, most of the urban cities are highly populous and will continue to grow, owing to
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 getting a house in
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 a city, will burn up lifelong savings.
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, having a house, creates a lot of dependencies in terms of facilities, unlike apartments you are not sharing gyms, swimming pools, security and so on. A recent study by Oxford university showed that 70% of the population of metropolitan cities stays in apartments and 40% of them prefer their current living arrangement in the long run. Staying in apartments
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 provides a sense of security, due to the presence of
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 door neighbours.
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, it is evident that, staying in apartments not only helps you to feel secure, but is
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 economical in urban cities.
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, staying in houses gives a whole different set of pros, which apartments cannot provide. One can build houses, brick to brick depending on his own needs, which allows you to customize the layout as you want. Concurrently, you can only have the facilities that you need, rather than the whole pack.
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, unlike apartments, over noisy neighbours won't be a major point of concern due to increased space between the houses. Concurrently, you won't be bound to building restrictions
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 as no pets, no maintenance work after a certain time and so on.
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, even though living in houses can be costly, but we can see from the above points that it comes with its own luxurious benefits, independence and solace. In conclusion, I would like to say, yes, there are more disadvantages of staying houses than apartments as in todays over growing world, apartments provide serves to most of our needs, making houses more of a luxury than necessity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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