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Traditional medicine, such as acupuncture and herbal remedies, is very popular in some countries. Those who practise traditional medicine claim it is better than modern medicine in maintaining and improving health. Do you agree or disagree with this viewpoint?

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The traditional drug is very famous in some countries because they believe that it is
effective for
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effective, for
 improving health compared to modern
medicine
. The idea of using traditional
medicine
 is not something new and it has been used for several years due to the lack of resources and standard cure that in result many people were impacted. I disagree with the idea that traditional
medicine
 is more effective than modern. In the past, people were obliged to use a different kind of simple resources to survive and the traditional medical system was not able to heal the complex diseases and prevent spreading of it.
However
, the modern medical system and cure respond to all these issues by using modern tools and replaced the traditional system.
For example
, if a dangerous virus recognises in a country, it will much difficult of a country to tackle the serious issue
by
Suggestion
of
 traditional drugs. In conclusion, I still stand
on
Suggestion
by
 my opinion that the traditional drug cannot respond to the need of today's world and the modern
medicine
 should use in all cases.
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