In some countries, celebrities get higher salaries than senior politicians. What do you think is the reason for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays it is not a rare occasion when celebrities get higher salaries than senior politicians.
Moreover
,
this
tendency became more often with social media development and its merging into people's routine. In my opinion, it is nor positive nor negative development rather than a simple lack of awareness. People are willing to know know what do they pay for or invest i
nto.
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in
From that perspective, celebrities give their fans a well-known and common product - emotions. The celebrities whoever they are: s
ingers actors,
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singers, actors
dancers, musicians; they all share with p
roduct
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a product
that is
understandable for the mass.
Furthermore
, nearly all celebrities keep their social media a
ctive.
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activities
activity
It is not only for the private purposes but the way they can advertise themselves.
On the other hand
, senior politicians whose job i
s
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are
u
ndoubtfully
important for the whole society.
Nonetheless
, politicians do not have a tendency to raise people's awareness about their job. Of course, it is p
ress
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pressed
function to keep people aware of the latest news in the country. But I am talking about the concrete product politicians give to the mass. For i
nstant,
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an instant
an ordinary person knows that a particular percent of the fees he pays are used to support the political apparatus.
However
, he c
an not
can not
cannot
associate the value they give w
ith
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to
a single person.
Also
take into account that sometimes politicians do really questionable decisions and the fact that trust of people towards them is rather l
ow
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lower
than the same to an average celebrity. In conclusion, without an activity from politicians side the difference between the average salary of celebrities and politicians will s
tabily
at a steady rate or pace
steadily
grow. Apparently not in benefits of the
last
. But they can cause influence on
this
situation through social campaigns and activity in social media. Nowadays, there are many teenagers and y
ound
(used of living things especially persons) in an early period of life or development or growth
young
adults become more interested in politics. The politicians should meet with the mass interests and introduce their ideas in a clear way not by old-fashioned b
rochures but
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brochures, but
through a common to y
oung people environment.
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the young person's environment
young person's environment
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