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Some people feel that children should be educated in single sex schools; others argue that mixed schools are better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Education plays an important role in everyone’s life. Some countries have single-
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schools while
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schools, while
 others have both single-
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 and co-educational schools. In my opinion, it is up to the parents to decide which model is ideal for their children. It is believed that there is less room for distraction in single-
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 schools.
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, students focus on their studies with all their attention. Gender based prejudices do not exist in single
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 schools and students can pursue whatever subject they like without any inhibitions.
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, girls in single
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 schools tend to pursue science at a higher level.
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, boys at single-
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 schools are more likely to take cookery classes or learn a language, despite the fact that these are often thought of as traditional subjects for girls.
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, mixed schools prepare their students for future life where both genders need to co-exist, be it at home, university or office. Boys and girls learn to live and work together from a
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 age and are emotionally mature in their relations with their opposite
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. They
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 happen to learn from each other and may pick up some new skills or traits. Developing mutual respect for one another is another positive. They are
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 sensitive in their dealings with members of the opposite
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. I think that both models of schooling have their merits and demerits. It depends on the institute and how well a child adapts to his or her surroundings. Parents play the most crucial role here because ultimately it is their decision.
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