The crime rate amoung teenagers has increased dramatically in many countries. Discuss some possible reasons for this increase and suggest solutions.

Some governments believe that offence level
has grew
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has grown
enormously
amoung
in the middle of
among
younger generation
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the younger generation
younger generations
in several parts of
world
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the world
. Many factors have led
this
problem and in
this
essay, an attempt will made to investigate the reasons behind
this
issue and
also
put forward a variety of ways to resolve
this
situation which I will discuss below. On the one hand
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one reason is the breakdown nuclear family. Most children have been brought up by their fathers or mothers because of divorce.
This
divorce can be extremely stressful and lone parents may face financial difficulties.
Therefore
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divorce can have a negative
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
on children's characteristics
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especially father's place vital role
on
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in
their life. Another factor is the lack of things to do for the young.
This
is
also
the most common method which causes to increase crime level
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On the other hand
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there are myriad of solutions to tackle down
this
issue. Scientists are convinced that
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parentsare
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parents are
responsible for to deal with
this
problem. And
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they
also
should, take care of their children in any case
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especially during adolescence period
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If the parents are at work all day and do not have any to spend time
to
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with
their children, they will commit the crime which they desire
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Therefore
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even if minor offences are committed large fines should be imposed on them
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And
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also
other solution is
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parents put them variety of tutors.
For instance
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sport activities, art and various subjects which they want to learn
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If they attend
such
kind of outdoor and leisure activities, they have not got enough time to commit crimes. In fact
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it is clear that there are various reasons for
this
rise in teenage crime
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but solutions are available
on the other hand
too
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If these actions are taken now, the situation should be prevented from worsening any
further
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