In many contries, shopping onlines is replacing shopping at stores. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages

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Nowadays, in many nations, online shopping has
gain
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gained
popularity and
overweighed
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
tranditional
consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
shopping.
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essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
this
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trend It is very obvious that shopping online has undeniable benefits.
Firstly
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, shopping online provides a convenient way of buying goods.
Instead
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of wasting time standing in a store as before, people
are more prefer
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are more preferring
are more preferred
to
saving
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save
their time by searching and clicking
in
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on
the products on the websites, whether they are at home or at work, or even in the street, as long as they have internet connected and be able to receive products shipped.
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, online shopping offers a larger
quantities
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quantity
of products compared with shopping at stores. Not always the store can provide
sufficent
of a quantity that can fulfill a need or requirement but without being abundant
sufficient
significant
items, but online stores always display the items and customers only have to put it in the cart, which is way more convenient.
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, online shopping provides jobs for unemployeds. Shipping is a great job with low risks and medium incomes. Despite of the advantages of online shopping, there are still a great deal of disadvantages.
Firstly
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, safety is the biggest concern of the customers. Purchasing something online
requiring
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is requiring
persional
concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
personnel
datas
a collection of facts from which conclusions may be drawn
data
details
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as full name, date of birth and credit card numbers. Bad people can take advantage on
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and do harm to the customers.
In addition
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, online stores basically can exaggerate the products without committing to any crimes. Whereas
tranditional
consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
stores, products are displayed in front of the buyers, for they can touch it. And there is no way for
ther
of them or themselves
their
there
the
seller to exaggerate it. Another issue of buying
stuffs
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stuff
online is shipment costs. Sometimes, shipment costs half of
product's value
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a product's value
the product's value
and many customers are dissatisfied with
this
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as they have to purchase more money and some can mot afford it. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think the advantages of shopping online has overweigh the disadvantages,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
in the new digital world,
therefore
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lead to the
reducement
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of brick and mortal stores.

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