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The system used for rubbish/garbage collection in your local area is not working properly. This is causing problems for you and your neighbors. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter • describe how the rubbish collection system is not working properly • explain how this is affecting you and your neighbors. • Suggest what should be done about the problem.

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I am
the
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 local resident and the reason to write
this
 letter
,
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 is to complain about the nonfunctioning of
garbage
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 collection system.
This
 is causing a lot of annoyance to me and my
neighbors
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 in terms of smell and diseases. In
the
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recent months, the number of residents in the area has increased and
accordingly
 the
rubbish
. But,
rubbish
 collection bins are still
same
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 in number which is causing the spillage of the
rubbish
 over the roads.
In addition
, the frequency of collection of it has
also
 reduced to 3days in a week as compared to that of alternate days. The spread of
rubbish
 over the road is causing
lot
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 of
troubles
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 for me and my
neighbors
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. The bin sits very close
our
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 home and
some time
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sometimes
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 due to wind or rain the waste enters our homes making it even worse. Two days before my
neighbor
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 fell ill due to
this
.
This
 is causing a stingy smell and sometimes we face difficulty in breathing.
In addition
, it is
also
 becoming the reason
to
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 the growth of disease spreading microbes. We seek your immediate attention to
this
 problem,
firstly
 we would recommend you to increase the size and number of waste boxes and
secondly
, collect the garbage
everyday
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 so that the area is clear. I have
also
 sent a copy of
this
 letter to the local media.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rubbish/garbage collection
  • locality
  • malfunctioning
  • missed collections
  • scheduled days
  • scattered
  • unpleasant odors
  • vermin activity
  • health risks
  • quality of life
  • property values
  • reliable schedule
  • frequency of collections
  • monitoring and management
  • community clean-up events
  • prompt action
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