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Everyone should adopt a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health issues. Do u agree or disagree

#diet #meat #health
Due to an increase in human
health
 problems arising
by
Suggestion
from
 following a non vegetarian
diet
 people are advised to follow a vegan
diet
.
This
 essay agrees that
meat
 can
cause
 many
health
 problems and following a vegetarian
diet
 is better.
Firstly
,
this
 essay will discuss how vegetables offer more nutrients and less calories
secondly
, the
health
 issues that are caused due to eating
meat
. Vegetables are rich in vitamins and minerals. They are a natural source of antioxidants. Carrots are rich in Vitamin A, tomatoes in lycopene and green leafy vegetables like spinach are high in vitamin B and folic acid.
Moreover
, vegetables provide less
calories helping
Accept comma addition
calories, helping
 us
ti
in the direction of
to
 maintain our weight.
For example
, cucumber salad provides only 20 calories and is the best choice for a
diet
. Red
meat
 is high in saturated fats.
This
 leads to high cholesterol levels in the body
subsequently
 causing heart disease.
Moreover
, red
meat
 is found to
cause
 colorectal cancer in people who consume more than four ounces per day. As red
meat
 is rich in uric acid excessive consumption of it can
cause
 Gout. To illustrate the effects of red
meat
, the American heart association conducted a study which proved that people who consumed red
meat
 and processed
meat
 daily were found to die early due to cancer and heart problems. To conclude, red
meat
 can
cause
 a lot of
health
 problems and it is better to follow a vegetarian
diet
. Anything consumed excessively is always bad and people should take
not
make mention of
note
 if they are consuming more calories than they burn off. Occasionally eating
meat
 would not do harm as long as you exercise and workout daily.

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