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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Businesses have always sought to make a profit, but it is becoming increasingly common to hear people talk about the social obligations that companies have. I completely agree with the idea that business should do more for
society
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 than simply make money. On the one hand, I accept that businesses must make money in order to survive in a competitive world. It seems logical that the priority of any
company
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 should be to cover its running costs,
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 as
employees
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employees'
employee
 wages and payments for buildings and utilities. On the top of these costs, companies
also
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 need to invest in improvements and innovations if they wish to remain successful. If a
company
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 is unable to pay its bills or meet the changing needs of customers, any concerns about social responsibilities become irrelevant.
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, a
company
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 can only make a positive development
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of
society
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 if it is in good financial health.
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, companies
should not be run
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should not run
 with
sole aim
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the sole aim
 of maximising profit; they have a wider role to play in
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. One social obligation that owners and managers have
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been
 to that their employees well, rather than exploiting them.
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, they could pay a “living wage” to ensure that workers gave a good quality of life. I
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 like the idea that businesses could use
portion
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portions
 of their profits to support local charities, environmental projects or educational initiatives.
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,
instead
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 of trying to minimise their tax payments by using accounting loopholes, I believe that
company
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 bosses should be happy to contribute to
society
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 through
tax system
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the tax system
. In conclusion, I believe that companies should place as much importance on their social responsibilities.
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, financial objectives cannot be denied too. Overall, it is anticipated that trend of social responsibilities is likely to incline in the upcoming future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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