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Buying things on the internet such as books , air-tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular

#internet #books #air-tickets #groceries
Nowadays internet
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Nowadays, internet
 is getting popular
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 In
this
 case
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 the net has a strong effect on many fields
such
 as online shopping, books and so on. In my opinion its advantageous impact on the internet is more than its disadvantage
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 Let's begin by looking at the advantages of online shopping. There are two primary
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 of shopping on
sites
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the sites
,
firstly
 it is
convinient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 to shop online
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 People can buy almost everything by using computers or phones by signing up with websites.
For
example people
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example, people
 can place an order for a backpack by choosing from their pictures.
Secondly
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 if we make a purchase many
kind
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kinds
 of things by online shopping it will be useful for us
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 since we can save our valuable
time
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 We don't lose
time
 to go any market or shopping mall. Turning to the other side of the argument
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 there are some drawbacks
on
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of
to
 buying things by using internet
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For
instance people
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instance, people
pay
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paying
 by cards when they utilize online shopping. From
time
 to
time
 people encounter some problems
that
is releated
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are related
is related
 to payment
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 Credit Card information is sometimes hacked and the money is stolen by
hacker
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hackers
a hacker
. To sum up
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 online shopping is more
convinient
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 and cheaper than to shop from a mall. It is getting popular among people
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Currently more
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Currently, more
 and more people prefer online shopping.

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