Young people today are better qualified than they were in the past. Some people argue that this is because competition for jobs is greater than it used to be . Others say that people only continue their education because the opportunities exist for them to do so. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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These days,
the high
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higher
professional qualification amongst youngsters, in comparison with the past, is exponentially better, which raises the question of why
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is happening. One school of thought says that competitiveness in the
job
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market is higher, while others state that the
education
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have been democratized, so anyone has access to it. I believe that
beside
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besides
the universal right of
education
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, the social recognition for academic attainment is the why many young people are extremely qualified. On one hand, many think that there is a wild and ferocious competition to obtain one of the few
job
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positions available. New
job
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seekers
have not only fight
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have not only fought
for that work opportunity, but
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compete against other skilled, expert and high educated competitors.
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, today the basic
job
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requirements or qualification
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is
even tougher, and has been multiplied.
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, an administrative assistant,
position
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a position
that can be considered as low one, not only need to type 40 words per minute, but
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also have
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also has
to know about business or tax law, accounting principles, and all knowledge related
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an office management.
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why, many young people decide (or push by
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overwhelming reality) to take various academic courses, careers or post-
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graduate
programs to be ready to for the
job
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market.
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, having formal
education
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has become both a right and an obligation.
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, anyone has the opportunity to have a diploma, degree or even a PhD as the access to be schooled is either free -in many countries worldwide, or
anyone can
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anyone, can
afford a student loan to cover the fees, the bank institutions
has reduced
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have reduced
their paperwork and the interest rate is relatively low. What is more, people feel incomplete or flawed if they do not have certain
education
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levels.
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is particularly true among young adults, who bear a great pressure to be recognized or accepted in society, and the fact of having an astonishing, sometimes enviously, professional qualification
become
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becomes
the way to get that recognition. Being a physician with a cardiologist vascular specialization without doubt it would be more compelling and interesting that just be a family doctor,
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. To sum up,
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it is true that to find a
job
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has become an unstoppable race in which the participants are more knowledgeable than even before, it is
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true that an ever increasing number of young people just continue on studying during
years
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the years
because being educated is a right, affordable and is an intrinsic part of a persona.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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