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Many people say that movies and TV programs affect us negatively while others say that they are too influential and useful media for us. How do movies and TV affect us?

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It is argued that there are myriad adverse impacts of films and television shows.
However
, others believe that they are inspirational and fruitful in their own way. And, I totally agree.
Thus
,
this
 essay will elaborate about
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
 in detail. To commence with, movies as well as TV programmes have quite positive effects which are useful for us. To illustrate, through TV, people can possess knowledge on current affairs, which are renowned worldwide, by watching news channels. Apart from
this
, through the help of movies persons can know about the life-stories of
diverse influential
Accept comma addition
diverse, influential
 folks, as in, biopics of illustrious personalities like Chaplin, Gandhi, Mary Kom and many more. So, many people, especially youth, can get their true inspiration from them in a good way.
Also
, on the flip side, miscellaneous shows of the idiot box and films contain their negative side effects.
For instance
, there are some programs that are serials, series, reality shows
such
 as The X-Factor, Australia's Got Talent and so on.
Such
 programs affect masses badly because they are, sometimes, too addictive,
therefore
, they waste a plenty of precious time of folks.
In addition
, there are many pictures that are lusty and crime centric, as in, 'Sex' movie of Medonna, etc.
;
Accept space
;
which affect individuals quite unfavourably.
That is
 why, these shows and movies may raise the crime rates and can lure human beings in a fully disadvantageous way. To sum up, I would like to conclude that watching TV and pictures contains both genuine,
for example
, recent updates as well as
grea
relatively large in size or number or extent; larger than others of its kind
great
 inspiration and evil impacts like lustiness and criminal
mindedness
.
Nevertheless
, gracious ones outweighs the dismal ones.
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