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Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say that we should protect only animals, which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree.

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Every species of animals are important for humans and ecosystem of environment. Some people say that we should protect those animals, which are useful to humans. I disagree with
this
 statement the reason behind it, all
animal
Suggestion
animals
 are important for an environmental balance. From the decade ago, human has depended upon animals like cow, goat, buffalo, camel etc. All are reared principally for milk.
Secondly they
Accept comma addition
Secondly, they
 are
also
 the part of rural area to cover transportation very economic like a horse and camel. In order to,
such
 animals are
work
Suggestion
working
 as protected and be friendly with humans like dogs and cats.
On the other hand
, wild animals are
also
 important for an environmental cycle, they are all depending on another one.
For example
, the grass is the food of a deer and the deer is
food
Suggestion
the food
a food
 of a lion. When the lion is
passed
Suggestion
passing
 away, the body decay and mix with the field of the earth. And it turns to a good
fertilizer which
Accept comma addition
fertilizer, which
 is useful to grow the grass, and
then
 it
start
Suggestion
starts
 again from deer.
This
 system
is continuously work
Suggestion
is continuously working
has continuously worked
continuously works
 to maintain the nature
in stable
Not stable; not standing fast or firm; unstable; prone to change or recede from a purpose; mutable; inconstant
instable
. Obviously, some wild animals are
also
danger
Suggestion
a danger
 for human.
For
Suggestion
From
To
 that point of view may be can transfer to the forest area like amazon forest from the living areas of human, and for that we live
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
safer
Suggestion
the safe
 zone. And
also
 the animals get their own places to live All in all, from my opinion
in
Suggestion
with
 a view of human aspect and an environment factor, animals are useful for both sides, and we should take
cares
Suggestion
care
 of animals which
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 our needs.
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