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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while other think that people and community are become more isolated Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
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 contemporary world,
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the usage
 of
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 has grown very rapidly. We
are using
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use
 it in our daily
life
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life, such
such
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 as for communicating with people, reading news or for booking flight tickets. It is commonly believed by some people that, people are getting closer with the help of
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internet
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the internet
, while others are of opinion that it isolates people from real society. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the both the views and
finally
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 give my opinion. On the one hand,
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internet
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the internet
 has become an essential part in our life. It has made our life easier in terms of communication. It helps people to maintain the existing ties, often strengthen them. A large amount of communication that happens online is often with
same set
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the same set
 of friends and family who are
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 contacted by phone. Social networking sites
such
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 as Facebook,
twitter
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Twitter
 has made communication a lot easier.
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, people can contact with their high school friends who we
has since lost
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have since lost
had since lost
has since lost
 contact using these sites.
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, It helps to connect people with similar interests and share ideas.
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, on Facebook, million groups about music, health, sports have been built so that people can easily make friends and chat with someone who share common interest. In short,
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internet
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the internet
 can bring people together where it offers a platform to connect
to
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with
 people who we already know as well as unknown
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, cyber is damaging the society relationship. Social media sites are making people to have false relationships that
does not
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do not last
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 long. It
also
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 makes difficult to distinguish between the real and fake relationship. Because of the
internet
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 people are spending more time online at the expense of time spent with family and friends.
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,
internet
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 addicts people to sit at home and not going out to talk to their neighbours across the streets, visiting relatives or travelling with friends.
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,
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internet
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the internet
 is creating a distance between the people and hampering their relationship. In conclusion, I hold to the view that
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internet
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the internet
 has ruined our interaction with reality. People should be wise
enough while
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enough, while
 using the
internet
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. They should have balance between online and in person relations
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