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Middle
school
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was over and I started high
school
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. At the end of the
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year of high
school
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they asked us what job we want to do in the
future
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. From that
day
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on, I started to think about which profession should I choose in the
future
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. After a long period of thinking, I examine how much
time
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I spent with
computer
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since elementary
school
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years and I realized that the
computer
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and the internet are the gateways to the world and that almost everything will work with artificial intelligence or codes in the
future
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,
therefore
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, I started researching
software
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engineering. I was attracted to both job opportunities, good salaries and of
course
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fun. In the
second
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year of high
school
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, I started the developing
course
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to make a difference
among
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between
my peers and become a more qualified student, and I was interested in
software
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for 2 years. On the
first
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day
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of the
course
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, I learned the basic and logic of the codes. When I came home from the
course
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, I was practicing more and taking notes because I knew I had to work hard to be a good developer in the
future
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,
hence
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, I was spending the most of my
time
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for developing. I wanted to go to university with knowledge and earn money by making websites or online selling while studying. The
first
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subject we started to work on was the Arduino and I was impressed by the
visuality
an energetic style
vitality
of our projects. Using
Arduino
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the Arduino
, we were making speakers, calculators, illuminated signs and even tiny robots, and I was seriously fascinated by these. I talked to the teacher and said at the end of the Arduino topic, can we make a
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that can play a song by itself. I had been playing guitar for 3 years and piano for 1 year, so I would record the sounds. Even if the teacher said it would be very difficult, we thought how
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doing
it for 2 months and we made our plan.
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, I will record the notes one by one with the piano,
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, with the distance sensor, the
robot
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will detect the distance and it will make a song by playing different notes according to the closeness. At the end of 4 weeks, we created our project with the whole class and showed our
robot
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to both our families and other teachers in the
course
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. Of
course
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, our
robot
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was a simple
robot
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, but it was a serious step for us and had crucial results.
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this
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study, I understood that I am interested in
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, robotics and coding more than anything else. The happiness of success gave me confidence and my
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anxiety was reduced. I was planning to go to a good university by specializing in
software
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and getting the necessary grades,
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I wanted to graduate and create impressive projects or be part of these projects. After processing topics like SQL, Phyton and C#, the
course
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is over and I started preparing presentations and projects to get my certificate. We made a presentation to all students and teachers in the
course
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and get our certificate.
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the
software
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attracted my attention and I was going to do
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in the
future
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, sitting at the
computer
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was a bit annoying most of the
time
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. In the past, most of the
time
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I was playing guitar at home or actively doing sports and I wasn'
t
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spending that much
time
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at the
computer
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. When I was in middle
school
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, I was the table tennis captain of the
school
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and was attending tournaments at least once a month, where there were other schools. I attended the summer camp of the
school
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to play table tennis better and took lessons from good teachers. Apart from table tennis, I was playing
soccer
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with my friends after
school
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every
day
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. If there was no person I knew at
school
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, I still didn'
t
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leave
soccer
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and met strangers at
school
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and played with them. The physical education teacher of the
school
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who saw that I played
soccer
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on the field of the
school
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every evening, introduced me to the coach of an amateur
soccer
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team
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, who was his cousin. 1 month later, I took care of the documents and became an amateur
soccer
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player in a
team
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in the amateur
soccer
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league. Everyone in the
team
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had known each other for at least 2 years and they got along well together, but I immediately got along well with them. Our
team
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chemistry held well and we had good results in that season. We used to go out to celebrate the victory and usually spend our weekends together. Unfortunately, one
day
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there was a disagreement between my family and our coach and I said goodbye to the
team
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. Two years later, two of my friends from the
software
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course
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attended our
school
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and they were both interested in
soccer
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. I couldn'
t
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play
football
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after
school
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because there was no field to play
football
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in our
school
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, so, I was getting away from
football
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day
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by
day
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. Oddly, I would start playing
football
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again thanks to the
software
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course
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. We rented a
football
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field and started to play
soccer
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again. We asked young people around us to join our
team
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and we created a
soccer
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team
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. We started playing once a week. I had regained another hobby after two years and didn'
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want to lose it again. High
school
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ends, but we still continue to play matches 3-4 times a month. My biggest dream is to come to better places in
software
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and to lead a peaceful and successful life without leaving my hobbies in the
future
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • standard of living
  • ameliorated
  • mentoring
  • physical health
  • mental decline
  • workforce diversity
  • exacerbate
  • quality of life
  • employment opportunities
  • work-life imbalance
  • ageism
  • retirement planning
  • pension funds
  • job market dynamics
  • seniority
  • compulsory retirement age
  • productive capacity
  • intergenerational collaboration
  • mentality
  • employer attitudes
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