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Advertising is influencing people more and more. Is this a positive or a negative trend? Give your own opinion and examples.

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Nowadays advertising has a lot of influence in
society
. I opine that it has adverse effects in the community, because when an individual is fascinated by seeing the advertisements and cannot resist buying the things which are unhealthy and it may deter the health of a human while others believe that it has a positive trend as well.
To begin
 with, if a new company wants to survive,
then
 the advertisement plays a crucial role in their sustainability so they are using many attracted ways to sell their products.
In addition
, they are using sports stars to create an
impact
 among the audience because of these people are being influential and using the products which are unnecessary.
For instance
, soft drinks these days it is common to consume frequently than earlier as many citizens are trying to imitate their favourite star after seeing the advertisements that they do promotion.
Consequently
, it is creating a negative
impact
 on an individual life by deteriorating his health when they drink
such
 unhealthy products
On the other hand
, to communicate essential things to people
such
 as swatch Bharath it is a positive trend to influence them by advertising on television. It is vital to create an
impact
 on a few programs if we need to bring a good change in
society
.
Moreover
, by seeing
such
 advertisements many people will participate in the events and make it successful.
For example
, these days, many celebrities have participated in swatch Bharath events which caused a lot of positive
impact
 in the community as many people participated in these events and made the environment tidy. In conclusion, even though the advertisements have a negative phenomenon in the
society
 when consuming unhealthy products, but it has a great positive
impact
 to spread about a good event and reach to all the people which can bring change to the
society
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Blue light
  • Sleep patterns
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