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Individual actions have little effect on climate change. For this reason, worthwhile change can only be made at governmental level. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, it has become more and more obvious that climate change is real and that it is starting to affect our planet badly. Surely, if we continue to pollute the atmosphere with current levels of CO2, the consequences will be enormous. Clearly, the revolution must happen, but whose responsibility is it? Some peoples argue that the problem is so huge that only international governmental action can have any real impact. Obviously, it is essential for governments to work together on solutions, signing up to agreements and, more importantly, keeping them.
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 on a national level, we need to remember that most pollution is caused by industry and that
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 can be controlled effectively by government action.
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, industries could be made to pay carbon tax on their emissions.
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, while the government must a lead on dealing with climate change, we are
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 all individually responsible for our own carbon footprint. In fact, the average person in the UK is responsible for about 10 tonnes of carbon emissions a year, while someone in the developing country world only uses around 0.3 tonnes a year.
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, if we are to prevent temperatures rising by more than 2 degrees, we will all need to use no more than 1.3 tonnes a year by 2050.
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 will require a considerable new lifestyle for the average British person. We will need to stop flying regularly, driving when we could just as easily walk and so on. In conclusion, I would maintain that to protect our planet, and all our futures, we will need a combination of effective international agreements, strong government policies and variation in individual behaviour.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • individual actions
  • governmental level
  • worthwhile change
  • impact
  • large-scale changes
  • set an example
  • policies
  • regulations
  • enforce
  • collaboration
  • renewable energy
  • initiatives
  • environmental regulations
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