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Some workers must work at night. What are the advantages and disadvantages of night-shift work? Give reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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In recent years, there has been a massive increase in the number of people claiming that some workers must perform at
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 and the advantages and disadvantages of
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-shift trial. As
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, there are both merits and demerits to
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 trend,
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 I opine that its merits prevail over the demerits. In
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 essay, I will examine all the relevant facets based on factual promises. There are a number of reasons in favour of my viewpoint.
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, the bad sleeping time when you are at home on a
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 off.
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 is because the
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 sleeping is not the same as the
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 sleeping,
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 quality so you can't recover
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 lost time. In conclusion, the foregoing discussion constructively justifies my stance.
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, the extra payment that they earn being
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 shift workers usually is the reason why they choose
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 period of the
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.
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 the fact that those extras are very helpful for the families so they often think about the pros and cons of
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 situation. It's not a question of feeling better than someone else, but of knowing how hard you worked to deserve the best moments with your family. To quote an example, the research conducted by the Department of the American Society
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 reflects on a similar line, and
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, it can be said that the proposition is convincingly justified.
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, it can obviously be concluded that
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 or
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 shift staff have to struggle.
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,
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 policy ignores the benefits of retaining experienced staff,
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 as utilizing their knowledge and skills in complex situations that require in-depth research and ingenuity. What is required is improved communication between the old and young generations. Still, think that life can and should be enjoyed at any age. Its effects are so significant that they cannot be ignored easily.
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Introduction & Conclusion
Ensure that your introduction and conclusion are clearly delineated and that they encapsulate the main argument and final position of your essay respectively.
Essay Structure & Linking
Work on structuring your essay with clear paragraphs, each developing a central idea. Use linking words and phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs together.
Supporting Examples
For every advantage or disadvantage mentioned, provide a clear explanation or example. Avoid vague statements and ensure your examples are directly related to your main points.
Idea Development
Expand on your ideas by explaining them fully. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea, explore it in depth, and include examples where relevant.
Language Use
Avoid using language that is overly complex or conversational. Strive for clarity and precision in your language use, sticking to formal academic style.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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