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It is better to have one true friend than all the acquaintances in the world. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#friend #acquaintances #world
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Real
friendship
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always matter
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always matters
 other than every person as it works in difficult times. I strongly agree with
statement
Suggestion
the statement
a statement
statements
 that a true kind of
friendship
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 is
benificial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 than many people who just know. Having
friendship
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 with limited but true people gives you
backend
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 help for all time. Many people who have
large aquantance
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a large acquaintance
large acquaintance
large accountancy
 suffer
alot
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a lot
 than those who has known limited persons. According to
survey
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a survey
 it has been found that people who had
few people
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a few people
 in their circle were happy as compared to those who had many people. Knowing everyone in
world
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the world
 does not always matter.
whenever
Suggestion
Whenever
 you are in trouble nobody comes near you and they only care when you have something.
if
Suggestion
If
 you don not have
something no body
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anything, nobody
something nobody
anything nobody
anything no body
 care
weather
introduces two alternatives
whether
 you are happy or not.
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Therefore there
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Therefore, there
 must be
such
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friendship
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 which
alows
make it possible through a specific action or lack of action for something to happen
allows
 you to
stepup
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step up
 with strong back end support.
Asper
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As per
 my knowledge people who had known many persons in their life are in more trouble than those who has known to the less persons.
For example
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, in Japan many people believe
on
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in
 limited
friendship
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. It has been said that if you live limited you are safe, happy and
prosperious
in fortunate circumstances financially; moderately rich
prosperous
. The reason behind
this
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 quotation is very clear that if you have small circle you have less chance to fight, less chance to share your resource, easy to manage and many more. In
nutshell
Suggestion
a nutshell
, I would say that small
friendship
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 is always better than
large one
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large ones
a large one
the large one
.
having
Suggestion
Having
 larger friends
in
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at
during
 circle creates
big problem
Suggestion
a big problem
 in your life.
having
Suggestion
Having
 smaller people makes life easier than other.
Therfore it
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Therefore, it
Therefore it
 is strongly suggested that there must be a small
friendhsip
the state of being friends (or friendly)
friendship
 rather than large
aquaintainance
personal knowledge or information about someone or something
acquaintance
.

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