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Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little can be done to rectify this. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, media have become more powerful since the development of communication technology. The influence of media on the society is undeniable. It is commonly argued that, people who operates the media has the power to
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 the views and attitudes of others, and little can be done to remedy
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 problem. In my opinion, I partially disagree with
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 view. On the one hand, it is reasonable that media governs, the people to some extent. Having
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 over the media means preferred information can be shown while disliked information is censored and removed from broadcasting.
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, people who
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 the media have the upper hand in adding their views and attitudes to the news while forecasting it. But most
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 information is believed by uneducated people. In short, it is clear that media can
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 illiterate people
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, there are some people whose opinions are not affected by the media. Educated people can figure out the difference between the fake and real news.
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, they have the capability to omit the distortions and think independently.
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, media controllers can
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 what is being printed or telecasted, but they don'
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 have
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 on peoples' views.
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, if a crime is broadcasted on the television literates have the capability to know the truth of what is displayed.
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, educated peoples' views can'
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 be controlled by the media. There is a huge difference between these two groups of people. Education is the main criteria that separates these people. Uneducated people can'
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 categorize the news whereas, educated, have the capability to do the same. The only way to reduce the power of media is providing education to the people. Government with the help NGOs should take initiative in educating the society. In conclusion, I am against the view, that the media controls the opinions of the people. There are some other people who thoughts can'
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 be controlled by the media. Education is the best solution for
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