Wealthy nations should assest poorer countried with humanitarian relief during natural disasters. Do you agree or disagree.

Wealthy Countries should help poorer
nations
with humanitarian relief during natural calamities.
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agree
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with the statement because rich
nations
have enough
resources
available
with
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them and they can afford to help them. During natural
disasters
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disasters,
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if we talk about
flood
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the flood
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, it
become
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extremly
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extremely
difficult for the
goverment
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government
to provide facilities like rescue operation to the people who are in danger as they are stuck in
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flood-affected
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flood
affected places. Since poorer
counties
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countries
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doesn't have enough
resources
like helicopter/ rescue team to rescue people from
flood affected
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flood-affected
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areas,
wealth
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nation can provide
with
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that
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resources
as they already own them. They can
also
provide weather
forcast
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forecast
technology to prevent
further
disasters.During
flood
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a flood
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in Mumbai in 2008,
help
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the
of
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US weather
forcast
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forecast
team, several areas
where
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evicted before
flood
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the flood
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. When natural
diaster
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disaster
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takes place, the
severly
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severely
affect
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the working
for
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the
goverment
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government
as there is
huge
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loss of property, crops, life etc, because of
this
the financial condition of the country
get
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poorer. It become really difficult for the
goverment
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government
to available basic
service
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services
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to its
citizen
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citizens
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like food, clothing, shelter and medical services. Wealth nation can take a step forward to help the
natural
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naturally
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diaster
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disaster
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affected country by providing financial aid to
poorer
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the poorer
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nation as it
help
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helps
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them to lift for
natural
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a natural
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disaster.
For example
, in 2006 Sri Lanka was badly affected by
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the flood
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flood
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floods
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, so
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a country
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country
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countries
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like India
had
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not only provided financial aid but
also
provided food packets and
cloths
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clothes
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. In conclusion, rich
nations
should assist poorer
nations
during calamities as they have enough
resources
available
with
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to
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them and they can afford to help

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