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Whoever controls the media also controls opinions and attitudes of the people and there is little can be done to rectify this. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#controls #media #attitudes #people
Nowadays, media
has become
Suggestion
have become
 more powerful since the development of communication technology. The influence of media on the society is undeniable. It is commonly argued that, people who operate the media has the power to
control
 the views of others and little can be done to find the solution. In my opinion, I partially disagree with
this
 view. On one hand, it is reasonable that media
governs the
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governs, the
 people to some extent. Having authority over the media means preferred information can be shown, while
disliked
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disliking
 information is censored and removed from broadcasting.
Moreover
, people who
control
 the media have the upper hand in adding their views to the news while forecasting it. But most of
this
 information is believed by uneducated people. In short, it is clear that media can
control
 illiterate people.
On the other hand
, there are some people whose opinions are not affected by the media. Educated people can figure out the difference between the fake and real news.
As a result
, they have the capability to omit the distortions and think independently.
In addition
, media controllers can
control
 what is being printed or telecasted, but they don't have
control
 on
people
Suggestion
peoples'
peoples
person's
 views.
For instance
, if a crime is broadcasted on the television literates have the capability to know the truth of what is displayed.
In other words
, educated
people
Suggestion
peoples'
peoples
person's
person
 views can't be controlled by the media. There is a huge difference between these two groups of people. Education is the main criteria that separates these people. Uneducated people can't categorize the news whereas,
educated have
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educated, have
capability
Suggestion
the capability
 to do the same. The only way to reduce the power of media is providing education to the people. Government with the help of NGOs should take initiative in educating the society. In conclusion, I am against the view that the media controls the opinions of the people. There are some other people whose thoughts cannot be controlled by the media. Education is the best solution for
this
 power house media
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