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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life.

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There are a number of students fail in schools, but it does not mean that they will not be successful in
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. I actually agree that failing in school, it is not end of
life
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. I tend to believe that individuals have different interests from person to another.
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, if we failed in academic fields, it does not mean that we will fail in our professional
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. So based on real stories, we saw a lot of people got
success
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 in the professional
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 rather than academic directions.
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, we cannot say that
education
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 is the one which it judges our destiny.
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, in recent real stories of persons around the world, we recognize that most of the actors have not completed their
education
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, and they become an asset in the art world, as they gain money triple times compared to individuals who finished
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 backgrounds. For the mentioned above,
life
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 will not stop for
education
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 only, so people continue up their
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 naturally. But there must be kind of ambitious aspect available in them.
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, they must not feel disappointed, if they did not
success
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 in academic sides. There are a number of student left school at an early age, because they do not have the desire for
education
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.
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, I know one person his name was Khaled, who was born in Jordan, he stopped going to school, because he liked working since he was a child. Notable, his father was handling his own business in a small
shop
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 selling grocery items, as he was taking his son to his
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 to help him in managing the store. So, Khaled liked working with customers and help them to select the best products for the customers as he tried to make a smile in the face of each customer visiting the
shop
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. Suddenly, his father died due to critical health condition. Now, he handled the store
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 of his late father.
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, since he controlled the store by himself, he thought of other ways to expand his business,
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, he offered a good to his
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 neighbour's
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, it went successfully, he won the deal, and bought, after he opened both shops all together, as a consequence, he got more customers, and his sales were increased dramatically. Currently, he opened a new company in Jordan deal with import and export items from other countries.
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, he has one of the best malls. In brief, I tend to believe that
education
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 is not the only way to
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life
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, as people have different interests in
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, if they could not
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 in academics, they would have succeeded in professional
life
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.

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