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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. to what extent do you agree ?

#people #prisoners #community #work #bars
Outlaws in
prisone
a correctional institution used to detain persons who are in the lawful custody of the government (either accused persons awaiting trial or convicted persons serving a sentence)
prison
prisons
person
 have been the
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 of many debates that aims to enhance the
cities
Suggestion
city's
city
 safety. Dealing with the best punishment for them divided many people. It's agreed that making them do
community
work
 for free is the best solution, because making them do good deed will make them more considerate and doing so will be useful for the
community
.
Firstly
, mating a person who broke the law do charity
work
for
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in
 the
community
 will push them
to
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into
 being more empathetic.
For instance
, the university of Toronto published study
tndte
a portable shelter (usually of canvas stretched over supporting poles and fastened to the ground with ropes and pegs)
tent
 which stated that did something good for others without any exchange were much less likely to do something bad of illegal in the future. When helping
someone it's always
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someone, it's always
 changing something deep in ourselves that push
u
The objective case of we, the persons speaking
us
you
up
 to be better people.
Secondly
, for prisoners
to do
Suggestion
do
 free
work
 will always help the city and people by mitigating the cost of some projects
on
Suggestion
of
 the government
for
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For
example in
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example, in
 the 11th century china used their own captured Criminals to build the great wall of china.
This
 action helped the
chinese
a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China
Chinese
 people survive many attacks that could many people.
Thus
Accept comma addition
Thus, this
this
 decision was very helpful for
ching
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Ching
showing
chin
 and
its
Suggestion
Its
 people than take the lives of just
heeping
a collection of objects laid on top of each other
heaping
helping
hoping
 the prisoners in their cells. To summarize, for many reasons like changing the prisoners personalities for the better while
also
 helping the communities its fat better to go with making them do the
community
work
instead
 of just keeping them in isolations.
Itos
Suggestion
It's
Its
 predicted that many countries in the future will
also
 adopt
this
 approach.

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