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Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them .Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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There is no denying the fact that computers have p
ositive impact
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a positive impact
on children. Learning from an early age is an initiative step so it is a good step to use computers, but its
time
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 should not proceed so long.
This
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 essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of using computers. Technology is a basic necessity in a fast paced life and it is far better to train offspring from an early age of handling it, familiar with all terms and operating it. The main advantage of using it is that it enhanced the cognitive skills of a
child
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, through the internet he will be able to get access to unlimited information. At the click of b
utton
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a button
he may study subjects of his own interest like geography, history, anatomy, space
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, he can seek knowledge of any country and retrieve the information.
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, a
child
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 can get a
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acquainted
about the cutting edge technology and innovations in every field of life.
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, children can shop through online. Despite of having a myriad of positive points, there are some disadvantages which can be controlled by the parents. Like excess of using computers for long hours is not good for a
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 as it affects vision and children are fond of playing games on laptops
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gadgets rather than outdoor physical activity. So in spite of sedentary lifestyle, parents should encourage children to have some outdoor exercise in free
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 and
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 o
f
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using a computer should be fixed so that a
child
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 can manage to get information in the free
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. To conclude, computers are used in schools and homes and has become mandatory in order to get success.
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, assignments and presentations can be don’t only in computers.
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, no matter whether its excessive usage causes e
ye sight problem
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eye sight problems
an eye sight problem
or any other health issue. The long hours can be reduced to limited
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