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Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#people #cars #cities
Some
people
 believe that numerous major cities across the world are facing problems with the increasing number of
cars
 and that
it
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they
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 should be banned completely. In
this
 essay, I largely disagree with
this
 approach. First of all, there are many benefits of
cars
, as
it
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they
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provides
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provide
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 a comfortable and safe journey, especially when travelling long journeys.
Furthermore
, it saves time, which is much needed in today's
fast paced
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fast-paced
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 life where
people
 give utmost importance to the faster means of transport for attending school, events and business meetings. By travelling in own car, one can be saved from the viral infections that can be easily caught
while
 travelling in
a public transport
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public transport
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.
Lastly
, during emergency conditions in the late hours,
where
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when
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 a patient has to reach
hospital
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the hospital
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 quickly,
cars
 come out to be
handy
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a handy
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 option. Looking at these benefits, it would not be good to stop
people
 using
cars
, as it invokes hard feelings among
people
 affluent enough to own
car
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a car
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 and can
also
 the economy of the city and
subsequently
 the country.
However
, there are some problems caused by the increasing number of
cars
such
 as congestion, traffic and an increase in the pollution level.
Cars
 move at a snail's pace during peak hours which increases travel time manifolds.
Then
,
due to
 increased pollution, issues like global warming and climate change have become burning issues.
To conclude
, it is not a wise decision to stop
people
 using
the
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cars
, as it saves time
while
 travelling long journeys and there are other benefits associated, but, I think the government should encourage
people
 to not use
cars
 for short distances and should provide aid in the form of subsidy to encourage the
people
 in buying environment-friendly
cars
.
Submitted by sharmanikhil05 on

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Well done on providing a clear response to the essay prompt. You have presented your opinion on the topic and supported it with relevant arguments.
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