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Band 5.5

Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some
people
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 believe that numerous major cities across the world are facing problems with the increasing number of
cars
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 and that
it
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 should be banned completely. In
this
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 essay, I largely disagree with
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 approach. First of all, there are many benefits of
cars
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, as
it
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they
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provides
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provide
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 a comfortable and safe journey, especially when travelling long journeys.
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, it saves time, which is much needed in today's
fast paced
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 life where
people
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 give utmost importance to the faster means of transport for attending school, events and business meetings. By travelling in own car, one can be saved from the viral infections that can be easily caught
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 travelling in
a public transport
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public transport
a means of public transport
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.
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, during emergency conditions in the late hours,
where
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when
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 a patient has to reach
hospital
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the hospital
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 quickly,
cars
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 come out to be
handy
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a handy
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 option. Looking at these benefits, it would not be good to stop
people
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 using
cars
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, as it invokes hard feelings among
people
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 affluent enough to own
car
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a car
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 and can
also
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 the economy of the city and
subsequently
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 the country.
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, there are some problems caused by the increasing number of
cars
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 as congestion, traffic and an increase in the pollution level.
Cars
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 move at a snail's pace during peak hours which increases travel time manifolds.
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,
due to
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 increased pollution, issues like global warming and climate change have become burning issues.
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, it is not a wise decision to stop
people
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 using
the
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cars
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, as it saves time
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 travelling long journeys and there are other benefits associated, but, I think the government should encourage
people
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 to not use
cars
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 for short distances and should provide aid in the form of subsidy to encourage the
people
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 in buying environment-friendly
cars
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.

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task response
Well done on providing a clear response to the essay prompt. You have presented your opinion on the topic and supported it with relevant arguments.
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Your essay is well-organized with a logical structure. The introduction and conclusion are present and effectively summarize your main points.
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