Some people say that music is a good way of bringing of different cultures and ages together. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Actually music is the most significant part of our modern life.Due to the statistics the music has a great contribution to the people's minds and relaxation. And
also
it effects
to
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in
the older
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older
people as well as the youngsters to compile the culture of all people. I agree with
this
statement and outline below.
Admittedly music
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Admittedly, music
is becoming the essential part of the modern society.
Firstly almost
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Firstly, almost
all of the singer's give concerts once or twice a year.
The young
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The younger
generation and the older ones come to relax and have fun in the concert hall.
This
is
also
a chance to meet lots of people and to get pleasure with your family.
Secondly as
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Secondly, as
the
technology and internet have
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internet and technology have
developed we are able to listen to the songs of the other foreign countries. In
this
way we learn another language and
also
identify the culture of that country.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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