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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to share freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #information #research #business #world
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In today’s advanced world, every individual is trying to gain as much
information
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 as possible, related to their fields. In
this
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 regard, it is the view of some people that there should be no limit on sharing
information
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 in
research
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, business and education; others,
however
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 believe that limited
knowledge
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 should be shared freely. In my opinion, complete
knowledge
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 and
research
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 should not be shared, as free availability would make it less valuable. On the one hand, it is viewed that every sort of education and
research
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 should be available worldwide. To elaborate it
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, with ample of
information
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 available easily, users will not have to struggle anymore on their own, as everything needed would be within the reach. Google is a prime example, with millions of users around the globe, benefiting from sharing free
information
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 on almost every sort of topic.
On the other hand
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, free dissemination of
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
information
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 is preferred, as
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 is
viewed beneficial
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viewed as beneficial
. To explain it
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, new
knowledge
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 is yielded through years of
research
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 and refinement, and if it is available
freely
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free
; the true struggle behind
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, will not be
credit
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credited
.
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, the pioneers and authors will not get the desired reward and benefits.
Furthermore
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, it would be difficult for the users to comprehend the complexity and intended outcome of the complete
research
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knowledge
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 on their own. I believe that, little
information
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 should be made
publically
in a manner accessible to or observable by the public; openly
publicly
 available free of cost,
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, for
further
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 in-depth details, the primary authors should be consulted; and will be paid their services. To sum up, it is viewed by some that, maximum possible
information
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 should be shared in various fields; others
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, argued the opposite. It is
therefore
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 agreed that, to maintain the value of education, little
information
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 should be available free of cost, whereas, for through
details
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the details
, respective authors and researchers should be contacted.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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