Parents should not pressure their children to choose a particular profession. Young people should have freedom to choose career path they like. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by

few people

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a few people

the few people

that children should be allowed to pursue the profession of their choice and they should not be pressurized by parents for any particular field. In my opinion, children who follow the field of their choice are more successful and excel in the practical life. Students when allowed to study the field they like, take interest and excel in their professions. While doing the job they like, the work hours will not seem hectic to them and they will be doing it like a hobby.

For example

, if one person who likes arts and painting is forced to become a medical

student he will

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student, he will

feel like a fish out of water, and the same person in arts class will enjoy it and

willfully

take the classes

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will result in better and satisfied professionals who take pride in their work. Children who have been forced by parents to follow a course which they do not like are seen to lose interest in class and indulge in drugs and other immoral activities in retaliation. It is believed that if they do not find excitement in

job

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the job

they will search for it somewhere else.

For example

, the incidence of crimes is higher in children of strict parents, who enforce their decisions upon them

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Children of

such

parents are seen to blame their parents for failures of life. In conclusion, whether it is selecting a subject for study or profession for students, considering the choice of students is of paramount importance

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This

may turn them into successful professionals or dissatisfied workers or even the criminals, in case of

worst scenario

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the worst scenario

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