Parents should not pressure their children to choose a particular profession. Young people should have freedom to choose career path they like. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by

few people

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a few people

the few people

that children should be allowed to pursue the profession of their choice and they should not be pressurized by parents for any particular field. In my opinion, children who follow the field of their choice are more successful and excel in the practical life. Students when allowed to study the field they like, take interest and excel in their professions. While doing the job they like, the work hours will not seem hectic to them and they will be doing it like a hobby.

For example

, if one person who likes arts and painting is forced to become a medical

student he will

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student, he will

feel like a fish out of water, and the same person in arts class will enjoy it and

willfully

take the classes

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This

will result in better and satisfied professionals who take pride in their work. Children who have been forced by parents to follow a course which they do not like are seen to lose interest in class and indulge in drugs and other immoral activities in retaliation. It is believed that if they do not find excitement in

job

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the job

they will search for it somewhere else.

For example

, the incidence of crimes is higher in children of strict parents, who enforce their decisions upon them

Accept space

Children of

such

parents are seen to blame their parents for failures of life. In conclusion, whether it is selecting a subject for study or profession for students, considering the choice of students is of paramount importance

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This

may turn them into successful professionals or dissatisfied workers or even the criminals, in case of

worst scenario

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the worst scenario

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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272 words

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Parents should not pressure their children to choose a particular profession. Young people should have freedom to choose career path they like. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Write a letter to a friend inviting them to go on vacation with you. Include Why you want to go on holiday Where you want to go Why you want them to come with you

Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities (for example, helping at home or at work). Others believe that, outside of school, children should be free to enjoy their lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development