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Some school children have less natural ability to learn other languages. Therefore, it is not right to force these school children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There has been a hot debate over whether students should be forced into learning a foreign
language
. Some people are of the opinion that it is unethical to forcefully teach students to pick up another
language
 on top of their mother tongue, while others feel that it should be made compulsory in the curriculum. In my opinion, I disagree that children should not learn foreign languages as I feel that it is imperative for juveniles to be bilingual or multilingual, to stay competitive in the current society. There are several reasons why children should be exposed to a foreign
language
 from a young
age
. The most compelling reason is that, being able to communicate in multiple languages will promote racial harmony. To be able to communicate in multiple languages will promote interactions with people from different countries and various cultural backgrounds which in turn minimizes any mis-communication. A
second
 reason for my position is based on an example of my cousin, who have lived in Germany since the tender
age
 of seven years old. It was a struggle for her to adapt during the initial months when she
first
 started school in Germany.
However
, in merely three months, she has learnt to converse fluently with her teachers and peers in German.
As a result
 of
this
 exposure, she has learnt to communicate in three different languages, English, Mandarin and German. A final reason in support of my viewpoint is that I strongly believe that being bilingual or multilingual will provide students with more job opportunities when they enter the workforce. I am from Singapore and I have been bilingual since preschool. By the
age
 of seventeen, I have mastered a
third
language
, Japanese.
Consequently
, upon graduation, I was offered several positions in multinational companies because of my fluency in speaking three languages. . To conclude, it is my firm belief that foreign
language
 should be introduced to adolescents at a young
age
 as it is proven to have many benefits and will prepare them for their future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural ability
  • foreign language
  • aptitude
  • cognitive benefits
  • cultural understanding
  • individualized learning
  • education systems
  • one-size-fits-all curriculum
  • motivation
  • engagement
  • negative attitudes
  • equal opportunities
  • skill development
  • strengths and weaknesses
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