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In many cities there is little control on the design and construction of new homes and office buildings, and people can build houses in their own style. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a situation?

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In many cities around the world, people have little influence in the design and construction of their houses. Many people believe it is better to allow people to freely choose the
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 and construction of their new homes rather than forcing everyone to follow the uniform
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 of the local area. In my opinion, a diversity in housing styles can bring many more benefits than drawbacks to an area.
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 with, cities in Vietnam,
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 as Saigon, have very few, or even no, regulations on local housing styles, which means that residents in these areas are free to decide on the architecture
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 their home. The only disadvantage that may arise is the lack of uniformity of houses, which can be a unique feature in certain places. The houses in Hoi
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, demonstrate a consistent
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 and
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 have made the
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 a popular tourist destination. If the house owners in
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 change the
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 and break
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 uniformity, the number of tourists visiting the area is likely to decrease.
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, the advantages brought about by a diversity in housing styles are more worthy of consideration.
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, buildings reflecting a variety of architectural designs can make a
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 more attractive and appealing to people of different cultures.
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, the buildings in the centre of Ho Chi Minh
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 are designed in both European and Asian styles, which has eventually given the
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 a more cosmopolitan atmosphere, with residents coming from many different countries.
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, the freedom of choice in housing styles can allow local people to be more creative, as they can design their homes in a unique way. In conclusion, though potentially making some areas less attractive by losing a part of their character, a diversity in architectural styles should be widely encouraged, as it can beautify a
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 and allow residents to be more creative.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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