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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Ready-to-eat meals certainly are very popular and have great demand, especially in urban spaces, where people have no direct access to their own food-producing.
Although
 there are still drawbacks of using
convenience
 foods, I think its values are more significant. On the one hand, the consumption of
convenience
 foods can have some disadvantages. The packaging of these foods
require
Suggestion
requires
 extra time and resources and
moreover
, after it brings another much bigger problem,
that is
 pollution of nature. It is a common thing to see empty metal cans or plastic packets in the forests or on the banks of rivers in Armenia. Another drawback of ready-to-eat meals is its damaging impact on people's health. It is not a secret that these foods can contain more salt or sugar,
than
subsequently or soon afterward (often used as sentence connectors)
then
 it is
permitable
allowing fluids or gases to pass or diffuse through
permeable
 for human organisms. And it can lead to overweight problems.
On the other hand
, from my personal view, the benefits of
convenience
 foods would overweigh the disadvantages,
analyzed
examined carefully and methodically; broken down for consideration of constituent parts
analysed
 above.
First
, ready-to-eat meals are
excellent solution
Suggestion
an excellent solution
 for those, who do not have enough time for daily cooking. One would lose at least one
third
 of a day, if decides to refuse eating canned meat, fish, vegetables, to name but a few.
Second
,
convenience
 foods give us opportunity to have diversity on our tables. You can make two or more different salads in a few minutes, just mixing
the ready ingredients
Suggestion
the ingredients ready
.
Third
,
convenience
 foods can be kept longer and easier, since they do not require much space. In conclusion,
convenience
 foods are result of nutrition industry's development, and though
this
 type of foods has some drawbacks, people cannot get along without it, since the benefits are undeniable.

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