Modern lifestyles mean that many parents have little time for their children. Many children suffer because they do not get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past. Do you agree or disagree?

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Now a days people are so sincere with yourself work and they could not have sufficient
time
for their children,
however
, many children's are suffering because their parents not to pay full attention towards your own kids
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I strongly agree
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to
this
point.
today
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Today
we will discuss both the views and we will find final conclusion.
firstly I
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Firstly, I
Firstly I
believe that parents give
time
for their
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
children's
if they do not give
time
to
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
than they have
suffer
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suffered
some problems as well as they are thinking that my parents don't love me
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for
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For
example most
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example, most
of the
families both
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families, both
parents are working longer hours and their children have spent most of the
time
on
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at
in
school and
further
activity.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
parents would be planning that once his or her children came to home at that
time
mother or father is available at home and give some
time
to his children
next
,
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most of the
time
children spent
time
in a school and teacher observed that Children was failure in
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an
education and teacher research that most of the children have
common problem
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a common problem
common problems
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,
his parents did not give
time
to his children for
busy schedule
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the busy schedule
a busy schedule
busy schedules
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I should
advice
give advice to
advise
that parents can change his shift and
atleast
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at least
one parent is with him and give sufficient
time
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such
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Such
as
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,
in
past most
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the past, most
the past most
of the families only one person went to work and another one spent
time
with his or her child
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in
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In
conclusion
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,
parents did not give more
time
to his children so they have a
mentally
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mental
effect on his mind and they have
suffering
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suffered
a
lots
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lot
of problems so parents do something and spent
time
with his child.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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