In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What are your opinions on this?
There are a lot of fields across the globe where
children
constitute for
a significant portion of the paid Change preposition
apply
labor
force. It is argued whether Change the spelling
labour
this
should be regarded as incorrect or as a way of teaching them work
ethics, accountability and providing for work
experience. I strongly agree with the former notion because it is immoral and lessens their childhood experience.
On the one hand, some people may want to allow the participation of children
in paid work
as it can be used to teach them certain responsibilities and discipline by rewarding economically
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them economically
This
has always been one of the mechanisms using which children
are lured into doing a certain activity; right from finishing their meals to completing their assignments, by giving a prize in the end. Moreover
, doing daily chores like washing dishes, sweeping floors, cleaning up after themselves, etc., are some of the habits they need to form to become self-sufficient. So, when the children
are allowed to work
at cafes, waiting tables for instance
, it teaches them a sense of accountability which reflects
in their personal lives as well. Wrong verb form
is reflected
However
, I believe the chances of them getting exploited are far more.
On the other hand
, a child
can get exploited, both economically and mentally, if allowed to work
before their legal age. Consider the scenario of a child
assisting a tea stall owner. Given how easily children
can be intimidated and exploited, this
child
would be overworked and yet get paid the least because she does not have the capacity or the maturity to fight. In some cities like India, strict child
labor
laws were introduced in the 2000s in order to get rid of Change the spelling
labour
this
kind of corruption. Moreover
, even in fair conditions, working at this
tender age would load them with responsibilities, thereby snatching away the moments or innocent experiences that they are supposed to enjoy. This
would lead to a negative impact on their mental health growing up.
In conclusion, although
allowing young children
to work
may add some work
ethics and a sense of responsibility, it is more harmful to them because of the immorality at hand; mental and economical
exploitation at a tender age. In fact, other moral ways must be devised to teach pupils these values.Replace the word
economic
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