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government should spend money on railways rather than roads . to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#government #money #railways #roads
government
Suggestion
Government
 expenses relay on development, and how the
government
 should spend their money or capital
assests
anything of material value or usefulness that is owned by a person or company
assets
.
Accept space
.
should
Suggestion
Should
 be spent it on improving railways or roads
.
Accept space
.
in
Suggestion
In
this
 essay,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will try
to highlighted
Suggestion
to highlight
 on both advantages and disadvantages
.
Accept space
.
firstly
Suggestion
Firstly
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
wil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 start
discuss
Suggestion
discussing
 the advantages of improving the
high way
a major road for any form of motor transport
highway
 roads, that links cities between each other.
the
Suggestion
The
road ways
a road (especially that part of a road) over which vehicles travel
roadways
road was
 use for several purposes and used by so many kinds of
transportation
 means,
such
 as, motorcycle, cars,
coachs
(sports) someone in charge of training an athlete or a team
coaches
 and trams.
those
Suggestion
Those
variety
Suggestion
varieties
 of usage
can be take
Suggestion
can take
can be taken
 as advantages point.
on
Suggestion
On
 the
otherhand
Suggestion
other hand
, it
lead
Suggestion
leads
 to
made
Suggestion
making
trafic
the aggregation of things (pedestrians or vehicles) coming and going in a particular locality during a specified period of time
traffic
tragic
 issues.
and
Suggestion
And
government
should to deal
Suggestion
should deal
 with it,
although
, railways
has
Suggestion
have
possitive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
appositive
 side
also
, that when the population use
this
transportation
 means they can avoid
trafic
the aggregation of things (pedestrians or vehicles) coming and going in a particular locality during a specified period of time
traffic
, as
aresult
Suggestion
a result
, they gain extra time that will lose by using roads, not only time, but
also
 save money.
the
Suggestion
The
 other
transportation
 means
cant
can not
can't
 offer
this
 feature by using it.
the
Suggestion
The
 other side, negative or disadvantages, the time
schedual
Suggestion
schedules
schedule
scheduled
 for train as
example
Suggestion
an example
,
also
 the way distance between the resident places and stations may be will be away from each other.
in
Suggestion
In
 conclusion, there us so many
possitive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 and negative
side
Suggestion
sides
 for both railways and roads
.
Accept space
.
my
Suggestion
My
 viewpoint, the
government
 should orient of consumption on railway that due to the fact of cost and affordable prices that railway
transportation
 means offered to
population
Suggestion
the population
, not only that but
also
trafic
the aggregation of things (pedestrians or vehicles) coming and going in a particular locality during a specified period of time
traffic
tragic
 solutions that trains offered.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • environmental footprint
  • efficiency
  • pollution
  • cost-effectiveness
  • economic development
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • air pollution
  • initial investment
  • maintenance
  • upgrades
  • rural
  • urban
  • last-mile connectivity
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