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Nowadays, children have more burden regarding their academic study. Some people argue that physical education and cookery subjects are removed from the

syallabus

an integrated course of academic studies

syllabus

as a result

children can concentrate whole academic subjects.I Disagree with the given statement

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There are certain

reason

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reasons

why people say remove the practical subject bin syllabus. The

first

reason is that if remove these subjects in academic subjects that time children can reduce the stress because they have more stress about those subjects in

this

way they can main focus on study after hard work they can achieve good marks

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On the other hand

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physical education and cookery subjects are more important and beneficial for children.

For example

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when these subjects are available in education that time children can play many games which participate

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they can learn new things which are very beneficial for them

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as a

coprate

of or belonging to a corporation

corporate

curate

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team work as well as they met with new people

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through meeting they can learn good manners

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secondly

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Secondly

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some girls can learn new dishes through the cookery classes because in

this

way they can learn how to make dishes

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those subjects children can make

bright future

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a bright future

because some children weak in study and they can show interest in those subjects

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To conclude, IReitrate my opinion

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non academic at school should be

involve

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involved

because through

this

subject children learn more new things and make good future

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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More and more people are opting for ready-made food instead of freshly cooked food. Do this development has more advantages over disadvantages.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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