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Some people prefer to spend lives doing the same thing and avoid any changes. Others, however, think that changes in always a good things. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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People throughout the world have different preferences with regard to the lifestyle. Many enjoy doing the same work through their entire
life
 while others want a
change
. In my opinion, I think the
change
 is important for a better lifestyle. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument, and
then
 submit a plausible conclusion. On the one hand, people are reluctant to
change
 because they have developed their skills in a particular area. Some employees,
for example
, do not welcome new processes and technology because they have already spent many years of their
life
 learning about the existing processes.
This
 shift makes them anxious and uncomfortable,
therefore
, they would prefer working on the same patterns.
Moreover
, when people get older, they become less adaptable which means they do not have the strength to cope up with the changing circumstances.
Therefore
, in
this
 part of their age, they would like stability in their
life
.
On the other hand
, many people argue and I agree that
change
 is crucial for personal development. Many thrilled and challenging people get bored of the same routine and they seek
change
 in their chores.
This
 gives them an opportunity to learn and explore about new things. These skills help them move forward in their lives.
For example
, 3 out of every 4 employees, working in the US, switch their jobs to learn new skills which allow them to apply and secure highly paid jobs. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I strongly believe that without embracing
change
,
life
 is stagnant and to achieve more, one must accept it and see it as an opportunity for excellence.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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