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The chart illustrates the import of fish to the US from Canada, China and other countries in 1988, 1992 and 2000, it
also
 shows the amount spent in these years.
Firstly
, the money spent on the import of fish in 1988 were about 6.57 billion dollars, which in 4 years rose by about 30
percent
at
Suggestion
in
 8.52
billions
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billion
. Whereas, after 8 years, in 2000 the percentage of the money spent on importing declined compared to 1992,
however
, the amount
spend
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spends
 increased to 10.72
billions
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billion
.
Secondly
, 60
percent
 of fishes were imported from Canada in 1988, which reduced to almost half in 2000, at 28%. The imports from China more than doubled, from 13
percent
 to 30
percent
 in 1988 and 2000 respectively.
Furthermore
, other countries exporting to the US rose up from 27
percent
 to 46
percent
 in 1988 and 1992 respectively, but slightly decreased to 42% in 2000
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