INVITATION LETTER TOPIC . You are planning to go to a music concert in your town and would like a friend to accompany you. Write a letter to invite your friend to the concert you are planning to go to. In your letter, say:  what the content of the music concert is  where and when the music concert is  why you think your friend should go to this concert You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Javier, I hope
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letter finds you well and in good spirits. I am writing to invite you to a
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festival which is going to be held in Muynak and I would be honoured if you would be able to join me on
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day. I am sure you already know about the event named Element 2024 which is being organized in Muynak to revive
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region with the help of the
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show.
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, it will be an open-air concert where Detroit techno classics, Georgian ghetto bass, and brisk rhythms from Egypt will be played by famous musicians
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over the world. Meanwhile, the show is organized to be held on June 5th at 6:00 p.m. in the western part of Muynak on the shore of the once full-flowing Aral Sea which is well-known as Ship Graveyard. Since you are a connoisseur of extraordinary
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I am sure you will thoroughly enjoy yourself.
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, If you are free and interested, please let me know as soon as possible to book our tickets beforehand. I am looking forward to enjoying
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music
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concert with you. Best regards, Bryan Wagner.
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Task Achievement
To improve task response, ensure that each point from the prompt is elaborately covered. Though your letter does a good job, adding more details about why your friend specifically would enjoy this unique event could enhance the response.
Coherence and Cohesion
Continue to use clear and logical structuring in your writing, as this helps in understanding and promotes coherence. For further improvement, ensure that transitions between paragraphs are smooth, linking them more explicitly where possible.
Coherence and Cohesion
To elevate your score further, more variety in linking words could be used to connect your ideas more seamlessly. Consider experimenting with a wider range of connectors and discourse markers that demonstrate subtler or more complex relationships between your points.
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