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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people say that instead of seeing the Internet as a way of opening up new communication possibilities world-wide, we should be concerned about the effect this is having on social interaction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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Communication is
a
Suggestion
an
 important part of one's life. It acts as
bridgde
a structure that allows people or vehicles to cross an obstacle such as a river or canal or railway etc.
bridge
 between two individuals.
Internet
 as a new communication pathway, can affect the social interactions? In
this
 essay
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will
dicuss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
 about the pros and cons of
internet
 communication and why
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 disagree with the effect of
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 on social skills.
Firstly
,
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 is a modern
technology which
Accept comma addition
technology, which
 is used
for
Suggestion
in
 a various ways.
one
Suggestion
One
 can interact with anyone in the world as distance can never be a problem.
For instance
, my friend moved to another country for her higher education and we
are connected
Suggestion
connect
 through
skype which
Accept comma addition
Skype, which
Skype which
 could be impossible without the use of
net
Suggestion
the net
nets
. And
secondly
, it is a great platform for communication for introverts.
For example
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 myself
is
Suggestion
am
 an introvert and
instagram
 helps me to be in touch with the world around me and talk to various people without the fear of lacking social skills. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will moderately disagree with the effects the
internet
 has on social skills as it allows us to stay connected over a large distance and updating us about the world around us.
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