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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country.

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All most all the people want to travel across different countries and perceive
comliness
the quality of being good looking and attractive
comeliness
 of that place. Nowadays, the government of many countries
are motivating
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is motivating
 tourism, so tourists can visit numerous centre of attraction of
nation
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the nation
nations
a nation
.
This
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 essay will explain with
fittimg
in harmony with the spirit of particular persons or occasion
fitting
 examples of the advantages which are minimal. To embark with, bright side of increasing excursion in the
country
Use synonyms
.
First
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 and foremost,
influxion
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 of tourists can boost
country
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's economy by receiving payments.
For instance
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, visitors spend money on hotels, entry fee of various place, food, retail services and so on.
This
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 will
brings
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bring
 exhorting change in business and raise demand of employees, staff, guides, managers in the area
,
Accept space
,
which ultimately leads to promote employment for
local public
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the local public
.
Moreover
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, in order to take
break
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breaks
 from their daily routine explorers are interested to go on tour
,
Accept space
,
to enhance the knowledge of history as well as wisdom about
diversity
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the diversity
 of rituals. Certain
country
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,
for example
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,
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
 has various historical and different
kind
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kinds
 of cultures, which is fascinating for
number
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a number
 of individuals.
On the other hand
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, there are limited shortfalls of tourism at captivating location. The primary drawback, highlighted spot has become overcrowded, which cause the environmental problems,
such
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 as pollution. Some time
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also inspire
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also inspires
is also inspiring
has also inspired
 illegal activities among
mass
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the mass
masses
. As
consequence
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a consequence
, may have
detrimental effect
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a detrimental effect
detrimental effects
 on
population
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the population
 and cultural heritage. All in all, it is indisputable that
therr
in or at that place
there
their
 are more benefits of encouraging tourism in the
country
Use synonyms
 than
demarits
a mark against a person for misconduct or failure; usually given in school or armed forces
demerits
democrats
, which are negligible.
Therefore
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, proper hospitality management and verification of every person is essential for
eliminate
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eliminating
 disadvantages.

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