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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that the balance between the number of female and male students should be maintained in all degree courses in universities.
However
, I do not agree with
this
 idea. The main reason why I believe that institutions should maintain the same number for both genders is that the number of students in every
courses
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course
 depends on the quality of those courses.
For example
, engineering courses tend to attract more male candidates. The main requirement of
this
 course is strong physical ability and male applicants can meet
this
 requirement while female applicants lack of strong physical ability.
For instance
, nursing courses fit better for female students.
At
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In
On
this
 course, tenderness, which is impossible for males, plays an important role.
On the other hand
,
universities’
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university
 admissions
is based
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are based
 on talent and performance of candidates.
Therefore
, the balance numbers of
genders
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the genders
is not considered
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are not considered
.
For example
, there is an equal proportion of each gender in a university and one gender is
first
 for foremost while the other genders to have
compete
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competed
 intensely.
Therefore
, there will unfair to have an opportunity to enter the university.
In addition
, we can lose a lot of merit students, which is a damage for universities. In conclusion, it is wrong to balance between genders in any courses of a university, and the selection of
universities’
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university
 students must be based on merit.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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