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As we are facing more and more problems, which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is irrefutable that nowadays the whole world has become a global village and communication and trade between different
countries
 is
also
 becoming more frequent than ever before. At the same time, the whole planet is facing
problems
,
such
 as environmental
problem
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problems
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, terrorism
and
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poverty and diseases. ln my view,
countries
 cannot solve these
problems
 on their own and governments of different
countries
 must cooperate to fight these
problems
.
To begin
 with, take environmental
problems
.
lt
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 is a bitter truth that the Earth is facing the problem of global warming and if the whole world does not unite to fight
this
 problem,
then
 the day is not far when the whole Earth will become a boiling pot and life
would
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 not be possible here. The Kyoto
protocol
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 has been signed by many
countries
 of the United
Nations
 in which, they have pledged not to make industries, which emit more than 5.2% carbon dioxide.
Furthermore
, there are
problems
 like terrorism, which are having a detrimental effect on our society. There are various global organizations, which are working towards eradicating these issues but it cannot be possible without trust and harmony between different
nations
. What is more, the poor
countries
 are getting aid from developed
countries
 to develop their infrastructure and develop themselves. ln these
countries
 many people are suffering from starvation and poverty which can harm the neighbouring richer
nations
 and
that is
 why all
nations
 realize the importance of maintaining good relations. Summing up, good relations between different
countries
 are absolutely necessary nowadays to solve these critical issues.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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