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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
According to some people, these days we can choose from an excessively wide variety of goods be it for
education
, materials, holidays, food, among others. Personally, I think that we do actually have many choices and I will explain the reasons why.
Firstly
, we have many options when it comes to
education
. Students in secondary schools can opt for subjects they want to do. As a matter of fact, nowadays there are even more subjects which are being added
such
 as entrepreneurship, marine studies and basic psychology.
This
 allows the students to have an aperçu of various fields of study and
thus
 they can choose precisely what they want to do at tertiary level.
Moreover
, not just in
education
 but in many areas of
consumerism
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consumerism, such
such
 as electronics and cars, people have a choice between goods which differ in terms of country of origin, price, quality, specifications, additional features, colour and so on. It is but reasonable that consumers are presented with different products for comparison so that they can buy the one most adapted to their need or want. A
further
 area where an individual has a huge number of choices is while deciding for the holidays be it for destination countries, hotels,
airbnb
 and places to visit. Many travel agencies offer different packages, sometimes the same package is proposed at a cheaper price in other agencies. In
such
 a
situation it
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situation, it
 is good to have a plethora of options so as to choose the best and the most suited.
Besides
, by going through many advertisements, people can discover about facilities that they were ignorant before. Admittedly, it is true that sometimes having a large number of choices can be time consuming
for
example looking
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example, looking
 at different brands of a particular basic good which probably differ only in the country of origin.
However
, it is always a smart idea to compare and choose the perfect good. In conclusion, I believe that in today’s world, we have many options to choose
from
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from, such
such
 as in the area of
education
, consumerism and holiday.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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